IMRaD Introduction Draft


According to the Food and Agriculture Organization of the United Nations (FAO), food production will need to double in some parts of the world by 2050 due to our inflating population (Siegel).  We have seen great strides in farming technology that helped humanity create higher quality crops, higher yields, and manageable farming practices.  The advancement of the biological sciences has created a what could be a new answer to our food production problem: Genetically modified organisms (GMOs).  GMOs are any living things whose genetic information has been altered through genetic engineering.  Changes introduced to crops can give them the ability to be drought resistant, pesticide/herbicide resistant, and more nutrient dense.  However, there is suspicion among the population of what exactly happens in the lab.  What could these people be doing to our food?  Is it safe to eat?  I surveyed [insert number here] college students to gauge what they think about GMOs and if they believe that GMOs are safe to eat.  I also conducted interviews with [insert professions here] to understand what they believe.

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  1. UnknownNovember 7, 2018 at 6:35 AM

    Hunter,

    While reading your introduction on the beliefs of GMOs, I was easy able to understand your topic and found it to be very important. I believe you started the paragraph out with a very important statistic which shows the urgency of this topic, and you also defined GMOs well. With that being said, I believe that you could provide more concrete information on the topic. For example, you could mention the types of biological science advancements that have been made which led to GMOs. I also noticed that you did not synthesize information from the 4 required sources. I think you should add a second paragraph that mentions the different perspectives of multiple sources.

    Towards the end of the introduction, you stated a clear gap in knowledge and then discussed your research, but you could maybe mention how your research will help fill that gap. You could do this by adding another paragraph which starts with the gap and then explain the research and why it is important. By doing this, you will provide the readers with more information and show why your research is relevant.

    The language in your introduction is very clear and concise and you wrote in a formal tone, leaving your opinions out. By doing this you allow the readers to clearly understand the information and then make their own judgements based on the given information. You also clearly defined any technical vocabulary in your introduction such as genetically modified organisms, which aids in the overall comprehensiveness.

    I believe your introduction is fairly well done but you could possibly add a substantial amount of information and synthesize the views of at least 4 sources. By utilizing these suggestions, your introduction will be more understandable and follow all of the needed criteria.

    Good job,
    Hannah Sadler

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  2. UnknownNovember 7, 2018 at 6:38 AM

    While reading through your introduction, I felt that you did a great job explaining GMO's and how they are relevant in the research you're conducting.

    First suggestion I would offer would be to use more sources. You start off with one in the beginning, but don't really mention anything else throughout your introduction. I feel that adding more sources will allow you to create more of a synthesis, which should be very helpful throughout the rest of your paper. Maybe you could also add a fact or two on GMO's so we, as the readers, can have a better understanding on how they can affect us.

    My second suggestion would be to add more citations. This goes right along with your sources, but the addition of more citations will make your paper more credible and professional.

    My third suggestion would be to be more specific in your first sentence. Maybe you could mention various ways where GMO's need to grow by 2050.

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